Christians and jews,would you agree with this version of Santa Claus to tell my kid?

Your Father in Heaven,made this world and has a misunderstanding with an angel He made,Lucifer,which made life very hard here on Earth,so one day after nine months inside the belly of Mary,one a small cave with cows inside,was born our Savior and Lord Christ.just before he was born,a bright star shined above the world and people all over the world came to that cave guided by the star.Some people say it resembled a old man which would be God the Father,on a big slate,which would be the holly Spirit,and the Father brings the gift of joy of Christmas to each and every one of us.Al dough life is hard,Jesus was born.And every year me and your mother try to give you something sweet for you and a toy,as a symbol,a way to give you some Christmas joy.Santa is for marketing,Christmas is about the joy that our savior is born.To much?Thank yu!